30 March 2012
Profile Feedback: Edition #1
by eHarmony
This month's profile comes courtesy of Dan - he'd love to know what you think about his profile, what could be added, or even what's best left out.
Sometimes it’s great to get a second pair of eyes on something. That’s why, every month, we’ll be showcasing one user’s eHarmony profile, asking for your feedback. For our first edition we’re showcasing Dan’s profile below.
Whether you’re male or female, we’d love your comments. What do you think of the profile as a whole? What do you think works? What do you think could be improved? All comments are gratefully received, but please, nothing rude or overly personal. Dan’s looking for helpful critique not harsh criticism!
And, if you’re interested in getting involved, you can find out more here:
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The one thing I am most passionate about:
Growing, I want to experience the world and I’ve outgrown my current town. I love my Poker as a mental battleground and to keep the mind sharp, I love my guitar for getting out whatever it is I need to get out of my head.
The most important thing I am looking for in a person is:
Optomism is good, looking at the future, got some ideas, keen for a little more adventure before stopping in one place for too long.
The most influential person in my life has been:
Its hard to pin point anyone in particular so my current close circle of friends who ironically are spread from QLD to VIC so I cherish their friendship and support even from afar. My brother a little closer to home is handy for a reality check aswell.
The three things which I am most thankful for:
The serenity to live with the things I can’t change
The courage to change the things I can
And the Wisdom I’ve gained to know the difference
Three of my best life-skills are:
Using humour to make friends laugh
Leading a community service group
Remaining calm yet resilient during a crisis
The one thing I wish MORE people would notice about me:
How different I am to most of the people around me.
The things I can’t live without are:
Guitar
Entertainment
Mates
A shower
Soft pillow
The first thing people notice about me:
Probably my cheek, I’ll admit I like to see what I can get away with.
Some additional information I want you to know:
I’m looking at moving out of my current town soon to grow and expand my opportunities. This is all part of it. Can’t wait to hear from you.
My interests
I typically spend my leisure time:
doing one of my many projects, it could be filming, gaming, writing an article/blog, playing poker, playing my guitar, breaking out the Xbox, heading out to experience a new taste, check out a movie, bowl, walk, stand in the rain, just experience life when I get time to enjoy it.
The last book I read and enjoyed:
Terry Pratchett’s Colour of Magic. It’s a book set in the discworld series and is a satire about many different things. In this case it’s having a stab at tourism and how tourists can be, the corporate ladder, insurance firms, and of course the obligitory stab at religion. Sounds deep but it’s a comedy set in a world with magic/chemistry medievil themes. Great Author.
According to my friends
My friends describe me as:
Funny
Genuine
Articulate
Perceptive
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Gemma
20 April 2012 12:57
Seems fine but you don’t say much about the woman you’re after.
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Kylie
2 May 2012 05:46
Having references to being outgrowing your current town & being ready to move on could come across as being easily unsettled (ie: not willing to commit). Might need some more context about whether that means you want your partner to move with you.
Also, the serenity prayer is a good affirmation but as the AA Motto it might make some question if you are in recovery. More power to you if you are, but that might concern some women who aren’t strong enough to support you.
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Mick janz
11 May 2012 16:04
explain myself better
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Girly Girl
20 May 2012 03:10
You mention ‘Using humour to make friends laugh’ as one of your best life skills but you haven’t incorporated any humour into your profile. I’m looking for a funny guy but your profile comes across as someone very serious and unsettled which means I wouldn’t read the whole profile.
Oh and ‘poker’ screams gambler to me.
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Jim
24 June 2012 03:23
Hello Dan,
Your profile shows a happy adventurous soul, a man who would be fun to be with. The slightly self deprecating comment about you being cheeky was a nice touch.
You want people to recognize that you are different to others. We all like to think we are unique.Is this a virtue ? The serenity prayer is a cliche, though you use it in an interesting way. May be it makes you sound a bit arrogant.
You sound a very likable man, I am sure you will find a woman to love,and share life with.
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Daniel
3 August 2012 15:55
thanks for the feedback
it was a little hard to not get a little offended straight up but my advice for anyone else is to keep an open mind, genrally I’m thankful that people are honest, it’s amazing how many peopl shy away from being blatent.
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Mike D
28 September 2012 15:02
@ Dan, your profile makes you seem like a fun, genuine, articulate and perceptive guy – EXACTLY how you said your friends would describe you.
Your identification of Poker as being ‘my Poker’ (given the nature of the game), in combination with community services as one of your best qualities, and your friendship circle which covers several states gives you a feeling of being personable and likeable.
Your references to using Poker and your Guitar as a means to sharpen your mind and express yourself is indicative of a creative nature. This reflects a quality of being articulate, as is represented throughout your profile sample.
I particuarly liked the use of the serenity prayer in this medium given it has 3 elements that you are “most thankful for.” This shows futher creativity, wit, and and ability to articulate/express yourself in a humourous manner.
Finally, I liked your upfront manner in stating “Most people notice my cheek, I’ll admit that I like to see what I can get away with.” This, again, is humourous, but more importantly it is indicative of openness and honesty. When combined with “breaking out the X-box” as one of your leisure time preferenced, these features leave little doubt in the readers mind that you are an upfront guy. In other words we all know we can expect a witty, cheeky remark if your prospective partner comments on your indulgence in a bit of me-time on the X-box.
The only negative thing that *I* personally might take away from this as a whole is that your ‘fun-ness’ may come across as being an indicator of fickleness or being ‘unsettled’ as one commentor stated.